Critique - Organizing Line Weight

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Critique - Organizing Line Weight

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Course In Progress
Stan Prokopenko
Let's dive into your "Organizing Line Weight" submissions! In this critique I'll look through both level 1 and level 2 projects and discuss how to improve line weight issues.
Newest
Tommy Pinedo
After attempting on practicing depth and form on the shoes, I tried practicing depth and form on women heels. This was a little tough for me to get it to feel there is depth and form. Feedback is always welcome! :)
Shane Ledbetter
Spent some time trying to draw the form here rather than sketching it. Thought I could use the practice with the other things we've learned. Hope someone can give me some feedback!
Henry
2mo
Before the demo, I did a comic sketch of Spiderman, but after watching the demo, I realized my sketch wasn't interesting because there was no organization in my line weight (except for the eyes and the spider logo on the chest). After watching the demo, I went back to that drawing and added some organization, using the hierarchy of importance method. I feel like the second sketch is a lot more interesting but I'm definitely open to feedback
@mathtry2draw
here my homework + intuitive linework I did on my own
Agnieszka
2mo
Love it!
Agnieszka
3mo
Additional examples on line weight.
Martha Muniz
Great practice! The one thing I'd recommend considering is for the Hierarchy of Importance version, where the center bud of the rose could be a secondary point of interest after the outside outline of the rose, and the leaf outlines that are blurred in the picture are ever so slightly less heavy. This way, it centers the viewer's eye into the key idea of this picture, which is the rose, and the background leaves are less of a distraction from that idea. Your practice is pretty great already though, so keep up the good work! :)
Agnieszka
3mo
These are my additional examples on line weight. I find it a bit challenging, particularly the techniques involving light and shadow, but they are very interesting. What can I improve?
Rachel Dawn Owens
This is perfect for this assignment!
@angelic_garbage
I'm unhappy with what I've done with my line weight here but I'm not sure what I should do. Please share how you would have solved this problem! background on ref: My dad's gettin old and he started feeding the squirrels. This guy appeared on my bedroom window the other day looking for a handout. Needless to say, I FEAR FOR MY LIFE.
@thewayofallflesh
I would bold out the hell out of the paw and foot and make the body even more light and the right arm (the one in the back) barely visible. Also the eye is grabbing too much attention, maybe you should leave it uncolored. I think you did a solid job regarding how tricky the subject is. It would be an easy-peasy if you tried e.g. light and shadow method but you chose the more fun option :) Ps. if you feed the fella he would strike a good pose
@angelic_garbage
this is a little better perhaps :/
Jack H
5mo
In this one, the reference image had pretty even lighting so I decided to use hierarchy of importance instead. I also tried to incorporate depth by considering whether each plant was in focus or not. Overall I think it looks nice, but I think the pitcher with the thickest lines could do with a bit more variation in the line thickness.
@thewayofallflesh
I think that an even outline of the closest subjects would provide a sence of balance. And maybe the farthest plant should be even more lighter. Also I think you already have a good variety of line thinckness.
@josephl
5mo
Giovanni Mackie
This is the kind of Line weight I did, and I drew the shoes even though I was supposed draw own image.
Stefan Sharkov
Your lines are too even in weight and value. Perhaps it is the light you took the pictures in, but try darkening your lines further for the shadows and making your lines thinner for the lights.
Stefan Sharkov
This was the hardest assignment for me so far. I struggled with my line weight choices and got my lines too dark in the earlier steps. Here are my exercises on the rhino as well as practicing depth and shadow on a pair of headphones. The texture of the charcoal pencil threw me off. Any advice would be appreciated.
@joel2311
8mo
i know its not one to one but i was concentrating more on the lineweight I would love to hear some constructive feedback :)
Martha Muniz
I think it looks pretty good! I might suggest adding more variety within the potted plants in the background. It's good that they have less weight than the most important one in the foreground, but they can still have some change within, such as weight for the shadows or less weight for the details inside their outlines. Especially for the plant in the middle, this can serve as a transition from the heavier outline in the foreground ground plant to the lighter plant at the very back.
Andy Oliveira
Stefan Sharkov
Overall, I think this was a successful exploration of line weight. Nice work.
Krisztina Eperjesi
I tried digital drawing for the first time. So my line quality is not perfect. I did a light/shadow and an importance study on a narcissus from my balcony.
Luis Ángel Ruiz de Gopegui Rando
Hello, here are my tracing works after watching the demos. I have to say that I have learned a lot, especially in the organic line. A great discovery. It's true that my two previous versions looked pretty poor. It is good to draw first without watching the demonstrations and then draw again after watching the videos. I'm happy.
Alex Jin
1yr
fairly satisfied with the approach, particularly in cutting down on the trunk wrinkles while maintaining the shape
Martha Muniz
Nice! I would suggest continuing to add weight to the branches, especially the shadow underside for the baby's branches. This would contribute to its importance to the scene and action, help unify all the smaller details of the leaves, and establish it as a foreground object.
Ihori Kobayashi
Practiced depth and form line weight as watching the critique video. I tried to focus on the people the most, but it looks like the arch in the front is competing.
Eruera Hohaia-Turuwhenua
I just wanna say who ever wrote the High Noon Proko town comic strip. Fascinating Light source and strong contrast in showing where the main focal point is. I wish I can read more of it. Even your puns made absolute sense of our projects. Haha Great stuff. Please finish and show me the rest :P
@teolindroos
Thank you so much for the critique! Really valuable information and clicked somethought about my design/process. These few nuggets you take me to another level! ⬆️⬆️ Thank you so much, I appreciate it!
Eric A
2yr
Thank you Stan for your critique and advice. I was very excited and nervous to see something I did in a critique video. I have watched both David Finch and Ryan Benjamin’s videos before, I am a fan of both of their works. I found the Proko David Finch video on How to Cross Hatch for Comics very helpful and watched it multiple times, even replicating what he did to my best. I tried tackling the rhino and cross hatch it again but got frustrated with my results, I’m trying to slow down, focus on quality, and follow David’s advice. This is my progress so far, along with my other attempts.
Lucas Montagne
Wow awesome!
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