Redid my rhino after demo. I can see some improvement. Feedback!

Good morning my second attempt after watching video is on the right side, but now that I look at it I think I like my first attempt on the left better. Feedback welcome

Before, and After I don't know how I do

a before and after

Hi guys. Here are my rhinos from level 1, had a little bit of problem when it comes to shadowing the lower part of torso but it was nice exercise

I did these before the video. Looking back at them, the second rhino could use some darker shades for more emphasis, but I think the thick lines are in the right spot.

Did one by myself then with vid

hierarchy primary emphasis on the shape of the rhino, secondary emphasis on the horns and head, shadow - illuminated from mid right, then shadow imaginary illumination from upper left

When I worked on my version, I never thought that I was "allowed" to give variety to the lines, and so all my lines (even though they had different thicknesses) had no variety on their own and were very linear. Going from thick to thin as the contours go into the inside seems very interesting too, I'll be doing that next time I use this method. I ended up trapping myself by thinking "make contours thick, and the rest thin". Looking at the reference as I was working would have helped a lot with discerning what is important, rather than just making the contours thick. By not looking at the reference, everything else within the contours becomes "just less important details".

Left was pre demo and right was post demo. I think the main takeaway for me was that the contour shouldn't be too light. In the pre demo, I wanted to emphasize the horn, and ended up making everything else too light in comparison. In the post demo, I think it looks better as the horn is still emphasized, but the darker contour makes the rhino seem more solid and grounded.

Hello, here is my rhino and I tried my best. I would love to hear your critique and appreciate your help.

Hello!! I just finished the “hierarchy of importance” method project. The one on the left is the pre demo version and on the right is the demo version. I like how both turned out, but I mostly prefer the demo Proko did. I really like the expressive sketching he did which made the drawing look alive. My version is solid but has no motion and looks stiff. I really would like to make my art more fluid and moving. Any tip you got, I’d love to hear!

Hey guys, just did the line weight exercise. Tried my best to capture the hierarchy and light/shadow with light weight. Feel free to critique whatever you want. Thanks for the help.

I found the importance easier than the lighting one

My hierarchy of importance above and light at the bottom. Feel free to give a critique

Here's mine for the 'Hierarchy of Importance' exercise:

I tried both I don't personally know if the shadow is good or bad here but tried my best :)