Hello, I see your plea for help, so let me give my two cents. I think your less foreshortened beans are pretty good, but I can see (such as #10) that sometimes things get a little unclear. Allow me to begin my essay. The most important thing about the bean it learning how the big masses of the body move, and to that extent, I think you've succeeded. It's very clear where the pelvis or ribcage is located in space. Now, if that was the only thing you wanted to accomplish, then you can move on. But if you want to make these beans really shine, I'd focus more on gesture and overlapping lines. My favorite bean is #4, as it's flow is one smooth curve, and the overlap line shows the pinch really well.. On the other hand, take number #6 or #7 for example. If you were to look at the overlap lines individually, they each tell a different story. But not only that, I think the pieces feel too far apart, as remember the ovals actually overlap. So for the future, I'd practice the two line overlap. Remember to exaggerate the pinch and stretch, something your two line overlap beans are lacking. For instance, in #3, the right overlap line (since ribcage leaning towards us but also pinching) would be closer to a cross contour (which you've done), and the left overlap line would be straighter, to show the compression on the right side of the bean. Apply that to #6-#9, and I think you'll be on your way. I look forward to your progress. - Dwight

Thanks Bradwynn, I really appreciate your comment. Yes, my lines are wobbly, I'm trying to get use to a charcoal pencil and using my arms instead of just my hand. The feel of the charcoal is different from lead, it's a lot smother, which I still have to get use to. Thanks for your tips, I'll keep them in mind. Sorry for the late reply, I'm still getting use to this platform, I didn't realized you had posted something.