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Yiming Wu
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2yr
added comment inDon't stay too far from the castle walls,
To me the two things that immediately jumped out is the lack of water reflection of the white female body in the center, and the left figure looking a bit wonky.... Otherwise to my eyes this piece looks overall very solid. I especially love the tone and lighting of that male figure.
This image on first glance looks like it has the look of those classic galley-ish paintings. Could be nice to polish a bit more maybe? like the crop could potentially be on a wall or something :D
Jan D.
2yr
Thanks Yiming. You're right about the lady on the left. Something's wrong with her:D
C&C welcome:)
Been loving the work of Artem Demura. He worked on Mortal Shell I think.
Liked This painting much more during sketching and planning I had a way more pronounced color scheme at the start that just devolved over time. Maybe should have stuck with it. Not too happy with the two figures on the left and managed to split the painting in half againXD with the big boulders:P
What do you think?
Yiming Wu
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2yr
And yes, by uploading to proko and it did yet another conversion trip due to image down-scaling, it's not as bad when I noticed happening in my project files tho
I remember seeing a problem in photoshop a while back where I was getting terrible banding on a painting but turned out to be only a problem with the way photoshop was displaying the image. Was fine after i exported to png.
Jan D.
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2yr
Sounds interesting! So sick of always having some weird problems with the bloated photoshop. my canvas keeps flickering!:D
Steve Lenze
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2yr
Hey Jan, I really like the background for this, it has a lot of mood.
I guess my biggest note would be that all the compositional elements are all pushed down into the lower left corner. Were you going to put a title at the top?
Also, I would add some acting to the character to make him more interesting. Use the pose, or body language, to show emotion.
I did a quick diagram to show you what I mean, I hope it helps :)
thanks Steve. i was kinda fighting with myself between cropping the top of the painting off and leaving it. the pose sure does seem stiff:p thanks anyway!:)
The Raven by Edgar Allan Poe.
Feels meh really idk. what do you think about it?
Can you post a picture of the model and a time amount so we can draw and post on IG with the hashtag (suggestion #livingsessionwithProko ) ?
I love living drawing sessions and it would be awesome to draw along with you guys and post our art with the community ;)
yeah would be cool if they posted a higher res version. They did show a photo for a sec or 2 and i snapped it on the live show:D It's cool to paint along. It's only 720p tho:P
Step way back or shrink it way down. Can you tell what's going on? Is the story still readable? Can you distinguish the important people/objects needed to tell the story?
If the answer to any of these is no, adjust until it's yes. Especially pay attention to the values—theyll be the main thing to work with. Also look out for earlier decisions you've made that you think you can't change, like the placement of things, or how big they are.
For bonus points, show it to a friend for only a short time--like 10 seconds--and see if they can explain the story from just seeing it for a short time.
hah I suppose the answer's no, no, no. The 10 sec test seems handy tho!:) I've acc just restarted the piece in my post below:) Thanks for the tips!
Jan D.
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3yr
Damn I just wrote up a long comment and pressed cancel instead of post. Ctrl+z didn't work. Great:D
Anyway, thanks for all the great critique. Here's the short version:
That's where I'm at now.
I tried pushing the figures together to fit them in a more unified focal point. Might still move the caveman around to fit the rhythm of the other 2 better.
I like the gesture of 13, especially in the 2 characters up front and sure will try to get that in the final piece.
I also tried to lead the eye around the painting using some contrast. Seen some of that in Mucha's slav epic that I've been low key fascinated by lately.
I also moved them out of the cave. I think it makes more sense to keep them in a more vague environment, not specific to one of the characters. Also gives me some of that nice sunlight.
Any c&c welcome:)
It's good that you're focusing on the general value structure to work on the composition. That's the right approach at this stage.
I think this new version loses something of the old one. The story I saw in the old one was "Wouldn't artists of the past be amazed by the tools of future artists?". I got a clear read of the cave painter, the easel painter, and the digital painter. In that sense, it worked well. I could easily tell there were artists from different time periods.
What wasn't working well was the tools, and the interaction of the older artists with them. It was hard to make out the tools. The palette was lost a bit—hard to tell exactly what it was, and who was holding it. The stylus was small and mistakable as a brush. Also, overall the cave doesn't contribute to the story, but had a lot of high contrast changes that almost function like dazzle camouflage.
Getting rid of the cave and making the environment more vague is a good move. But I'm not sure about clumping them together. It makes it harder to read each one, and parse them out as distinct parts of the story. And the tablet is now really tiny and not part of the story.
The story I read now is something like: There's a classroom, with the teacher walking around with a tablet helping the students. The teacher is currently helping a student who is painting something out of view. But there are also other students working on others things (the cave painter)
Jan D.
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3yr
They look great to me tbh:D The only thing I could maybe say is that you could try to clean them up a little more around the face/focal point. Unless they are just quicker practice then great job!:)
