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Tamir Bahar
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10mo
added comment inDemo - Hierarchy of Importance Line Weight
Another attempt, after watching half of the demo
Tamir Bahar
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10mo
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Here are my 2 first attempts (well, there was another one, but the pencil was not sharp enough and it was a mess...).
This was _a lot_ harder than I expected, and I feel I need to work on this more.
I also have no idea what to do with boundaries between dark and light - should I put a thick or a thin line there?
Tamir Bahar
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11mo
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Lines exercises + mushrooms. Tried doing the straight lines in multiple directions, and it's clear that some are better than others.
Tamir Bahar
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11mo
A more practice sketches I did while watching this demo (it was hard for me to watch in one go - so these spanned over multiple days).
It's fun to try and apply the things I learned from the demo to my own drawing.
Tamir Bahar
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11mo
Asked for help
Took me quite a few attempts to get something I'm ok with.
I kept moving from confident lines to small fidgety lines with my fingers.
But it was fun, and I can feel some improvement in my lines.
@plucketlooploop
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1yr
1st 2 photos were my first try the 2nd 2 were my second try. I didn't watch the demo yet. Thanks for looking. Please as many critiques as you can.
Good work! The improvement between attempts is impressive!
Regarding the second snail, there are some points I think are worth addressing
- Add the top-plane of the piece of wood. Currently it's a square and not a box, which makes it look like the snail is floating above it;
- Try to avoid the cross-contour on the shell. If you do want to keep it - I think the lines need to be significantly lighter than the contour lines;
- I think the shape of the snail's head reads clearer if the pointy things are added onto it, and not a continuation of its contour lines.
Tamir Bahar
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11mo
Did the boots again, after watching the snail demo + the blocking out of the boots.
Took quite a few attempts, but they finally look like boots! I'm pleased.
Mark Denny
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1yr
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My second attempt at a pear, and the first with pencil. Right now, for me, it feels a bit flat, and I don't get a sense of light cast. I also struggled to differentiate the 2 shades of the dark part of the shadow, and have some small, dark pointy shadows (along the upper left) that I don't find satisfying. Welcome to feedback!
I like the way the pear looks. It does seem a bit flat (as opposed to rouneded), but it clearly is standing on a plane and has shadow.
As for the shades - the dark shadow and light shadow seem clearly separated to me. But then the dark half-tone is almost the same value as the light-shadow. I'd work on separating those. Maybe draw the values you're aiming for side-by-side on the page, as squares, to see the gradation and work on that a bit?
I'd also try doing without the outlines, as they create false separation between values.
One last thing - I don't know if it's the picture or the page, but the page looks kinda dark. If it's not white paper, I highly recommend drawing on white. I tried drawing on toned paper, and it's so much harder to get the values right!
Guillermo Andrés
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1yr
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Hi everyone!!
1st try (before watching the demo video), 2nd try (after the demo), and 3rd try (after watching the critique video).
Any critique or comment would be appreciated.
The improvement from the first to the other two is really impressive!
One thing I'd still try to work on is avoiding the outlines. They are still visible on the lighter parts of the pear in the 3rd drawing.
Tenacious B
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1yr
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I really like the way it looks.
The one thing I'd try to change is avoiding the outlines for the shape. You can trace them out with very light lines, but the way they currently surround both the shadow and the highlights makes it hard to see the actual edges, and effects the lighting as well.
