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Mark Denny
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1yr
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Final attempt at a pear! Moving on!
Mark Denny
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1yr
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My second attempt at a pear, and the first with pencil. Right now, for me, it feels a bit flat, and I don't get a sense of light cast. I also struggled to differentiate the 2 shades of the dark part of the shadow, and have some small, dark pointy shadows (along the upper left) that I don't find satisfying. Welcome to feedback!
I like the way the pear looks. It does seem a bit flat (as opposed to rouneded), but it clearly is standing on a plane and has shadow.
As for the shades - the dark shadow and light shadow seem clearly separated to me. But then the dark half-tone is almost the same value as the light-shadow. I'd work on separating those. Maybe draw the values you're aiming for side-by-side on the page, as squares, to see the gradation and work on that a bit?
I'd also try doing without the outlines, as they create false separation between values.
One last thing - I don't know if it's the picture or the page, but the page looks kinda dark. If it's not white paper, I highly recommend drawing on white. I tried drawing on toned paper, and it's so much harder to get the values right!
Mark Denny
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1yr
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I've been enjoying using pen and used it here. I know i should be using pencil but wanted to post this nonetheless. Because I used pen there are a few test lines in the picture that I couldn't erase
Nice job! It can be quite hard to work in pen, I think you did a great job capturing the likeness, but my feedback would be to watch the critique videos and see where outlining the shadow shapes with a hard line can detract from the overall lesson. Stan wants us to work on line quality, shading areas with even tone right up the edge of the next value! I hope to see your pencil version if you end up retrying this one! Great work though, I like the way you are seeing and simplifying!
Vitor Lara
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2yr
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Hello guys, im from Brazil. In this video David broke the “180 rule” in the last panel, right? I’ve read the script and made a sketch for the page and its 5 panels, and the last one gave me trouble. I’ve tried to be faithfull to the script, bug in order to respect the rule my hero was seen from behind. There are some rules and cases when you could break this “180 rule”? Thanks in advance!
i think breaking the rule works for two reasons: (1) the characters in panel 4 are looking off panel so it makes sense that in panel 5 we see what they're looking at, and by seeing the hero from their POV, (i.e. behind them, so that we're sharing their sight-line), we experience the hero as they do (2) the introduction of the hero, a new character, permits a reverse shot from the previous angle so that we're not looking at the back or side of the hero. If we want to see his face in a three-person scene, we need to break the 180 rule. So maybe the 180 rule only really applies for two-people. I don't know though! I'm new to this.
