@irdisey very good job creating a convincing character in active storytelling pose. As for the feedback of an initial reaction from an outside viewer, perhaps consider your choice of how you depict the tilt of the head. In photo its actually feels more dramatic in storytelling by head and eyes looking up, maybe 30 degree angle, as compared to drawing which feels a little stiff, looking about horizontal straight ahead. Also perhaps consider the fingers, hand and thumb simplications as area which could be made more convincing. An idea for next time could be to study how other artists you like depict hands and compare to your approach. I hope that helps.