W.I.M.U Can I ask if you did a structural drawing first, or did you try to loosely eye in the proportions? It doesn't seem too bad, but I think with more time spent on measuring and making sure all of the landmarks of the head and face are mapped out before drawing any detail at all, you will suddenly notice a huge improvement. One thing that led me to think this is that the hair doesn't look disconnected as such, but it does look too small, the hair at the back of the head should be almost in line with the back of her ear, on yours, it looks to be more in the middle of her ear, due to a small indentation you have created rather than it being rounded with the skull. If you spend half the drawing or more measuring, marking, and getting the proportions of the anatomy correct, and the other half on detailing and shading, I think you'll see a sudden leveling up of your finish. Hope that helps somewhat.