"I feel like this piece had more personality in the sketch." That's a pretty common feeling, so you're not alone there. In the sketch the lines are lighter on the rope and her scarf, and a little thicker on her face. This helps focus the eyes on her face, and pulls it forward, whereas in the inked version everything is just as thick and dark. That flattens it out a bit. The rope also has a lot of detail put into it, so it's competing with her for attention.

I can't speak to the proportions because I'm not much of a draftsman, but in terms of personality, I see two things. First, the inked version has a white line between her darker lips, which suggests that we are seeing teeth - her mouth is partly open. When your lips are closed, that line is the darkest part. Second, the shading under her eyebrows makes it look like they are raised, although I can't quite explain why. I think it might be that the darker shading suggests that her brow protrudes more, which pushes her eyebrows toward the viewer, creating that "upward" effect. Not sure, though. The combined effect of the open mouth and the raised brow changes her expression from determined to quizzical. The inking itself looks great; it just had those very subtle effects here.

Hey Adnan, I like your drawing, it looks like a vintage tattoo. I did a draw over to show you how you can improve your drawing from your imagination. I hope this is helpful, keep drawing :)