Another request for critique
2yr
@paper
Hello, alongside several drawing I had just posted, I would also like to ask critique for this remake of an old painting I did a year ago (it's here if anyone interested https://www.proko.com/community/topics/hello-i-made-another-fanart-would-like-some-critism) But the original was done with gouache/ acrylic/ watermixable oil on acrylic paper. I frame it behind glass but I realized a year later that the glass wasn't uv protected, meaning it would darken if left exposed to any direct/ indirect sunlight. I wanted to change the glass but the glob of watermixable oil stuck to the glass, meaning it might rip the paper off if I try to dismantle it ;_:
So in light of this, I remake my old painting in oil (The medium that I actually wanted to create it in the first place but got afraid because of the toxicity of the solvent)
I already mentioned James Bama as one of my influence for this painting in my old post, his thoughtful costume design and his respect for the sitter, to give each of his subject a dignity with their own problem. Even though the character I'm painting isn't real, I want to give them as much humanity Bama does.
But also, I don't think I mention Valentin Serov, whose color palette really attract me. This part may be a bit more general than what this post is discussing, but I really want my painting to be as varied in color as Serov does. When I look at James Bama work, even though the thing he is painting varied from painting to painting, and the texture and application is different, I found their color so similar that it started to annoy me. Serov's work are also kinda similar (at least, if you compare him to someone like Jeff Watt or Fechin) but I found there's enough variation to make his body of work interesting. Something I strive for in my work.
Speaking of Fechin, this is probably the final artist whose work is most noticeable here. In term of this painting, it probably is the biggest influence, since I wanted to simulate the viewer being in a blizzard and looking at this girl and Fechin's brushstroke I found perfect. Though in term of overall career, I'll probably move away from his work, considering the more I look at it, the more I feel it gimmicky >_< (Also, this may be unrelated, and I'm sure the man I'm tagging is busy- so I'm very sorry about this, but I wonder if Mr @Stan Prokopenko would like this, considering he's a big Fechin fan)
Anyway, going back 50 sentences, the 2 biggest critic I would like to know is if the figure of Reimu (the girl in the painting) not being directly in the middle and not being symmetrical annoy the viewer, I try to fix this asymmetry in csp but for the love of me couldn't make it perfectly balance, it always either made the painting boring or when I flip it, it became asymmetrical again. I'm asking because I wonder if this is something I should be worried about or if it's all in my head, I saw John singer Sargent's Lady Agnew (https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/f/fe/Edinburgh_NGS_Singer_Sargent_Lady_Agnew.JPG/800px-Edinburgh_NGS_Singer_Sargent_Lady_Agnew.JPG) and Ilya Repin's Autumn Bouquet (https://ru.wikipedia.org/wiki/%D0%A0%D0%B5%D0%BF%D0%B8%D0%BD,_%D0%98%D0%BB%D1%8C%D1%8F_%D0%95%D1%84%D0%B8%D0%BC%D0%BE%D0%B2%D0%B8%D1%87#/media/%D0%A4%D0%B0%D0%B9%D0%BB:Repin_bouquet.jpg) And I don't think people care about the fact that both of them are off center (But then again, I don't know how much people notice that or if these painters were still alive today, would they groan at this fact? Would they want to change it if given the opportunity? I wonder)
Secondly, I ask if the bow on her head is distracting. I added it there because the original design of Reimu had it there, but I'm starting to wonder if I should downplay it more considering the rest of her outfit is very down to earth, and also not to mention that her expression is so serious, that I ask "will this ruin the tone of the painting? Is this not consistent enough?" I try ridding of it when the oil paint was still wet (hence the thick paint above her bow) but in the end it made the design less interesting and more boring. So since I can't fix it now, I will just ask for some opinions and see if I can 'fix' it for my next painting
This post had become too long. I only thank the people who have read this from start to finish and had given their time to write a feedback for my work (thank you a lot >_<)
(Oh also, I know this is rare, since I usually only tag you guys once per month, but @Liandro and @Jesper Axelsson any thoughts?)
