Hi there, this is my first thing here - I think I can tell why it looks a bit ‘off’ - too few ‘chisel planes’, too few halftone areas, and scratchy shading in the lighter area, but I’d be very grateful for any and all observations from those with more (any!) experience. Thanks in advance for all feedback.

I got excited and ran around the corner to a supermarket and bought whatever pencils they had. I forgot to even buy a sharpener.