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Here are my five passes at laying out the page. I chose the second page that David provided.
My initial thought was to end the page dramatically with the scientist leaving the scene, so with my first attempt I laid things out to lead to that moment.
For attempt 2, i reread the script and realized i missed that the last panel is supposed to be through the lens of the camera. I also changed the angle and sizing of panel five to make it more dramatic.
On attempt 3 I did some editing of the script. We are given a description of the building from the outside, then immediately given a new description of the inside where the scene actually takes place. I decided to cut the outdoor panel to make the page more concise. also changed the angle of the clawed hand again. This new angle allowed me to showcase some violence and action. I think it really energizes the the page. After looking at the page as a whole though, I realized the focus goes straight down the page
On Attempt 4, I went all in on the claw. I feel that choosing to focus on it really gave the page a central moment to work around. I also tried to combine panels 1 and 2 from the script. The idea is to establish the lab in the foreground, and have the proko sign in the background outside a window.
For the last attempt, I decided to do what I was told and bring back the panel of the building.
I personally like either 4 or 5 the most. The one I'd choose to work would depend on the rest of the story. If it's important, or difficult to figure out where the scene takes place, I would pick 5. If not, I would go with 4.
What do you think of my thought process? Are there details that I'm missing or should focus on more? Where do you disagree with me?
Daniel Albuquerque de Insfrán
3yr
I think 5 reads better. I had doubts about the history that I got clear at the 5th.
Nice...
Liked the third rule... I will try to look up to it wile drawing...
Those were like nice vocabulary presented to test on composition.
thx!!!