Hi, Great improvement! Getting Rid of those lines around the highlights and halftone definitely works to make the shading more realistic! The proportions and construction are also much better! I would say that the the main problem is that the masses of value are still to hard. Everything in your drawing would benefit from being much softer. That would help to define the soft turning of the form. For example in this pear drawing by Stephen Bauman (Attached) everything is much softer, although he still keeps the shape design and value organization just visible. A helpful phrase to remember is to keep things ''soft but specific''. One other thing is I think the contour and shadow shapes in your first drawing looks much better where as the second attempt looks too angular to me. As Harold Speed suggests, the construction ''envelope shape'' should only be used to get correct proportions. Once you have that you can be more gestural and natural in your drawing, especially when drawing a soft and natural form such as as pear. Hope that helps!