misfire
4yr
RItesh Dhande
a short comic...
any improvements?
The one thing I think this is lacking is page flow. The Idea that you should arrange panels in a specific order that mimics the way we read text.
The panels' order should be left to right, top to bottom (like the attached image). If you want more practical examples, google "comic page flow" and if you want to go more in-depth, Scott McCloud's Making Comics has a good chapter covering the topic.
On thing to improve the existing panel arrangement flow wise, would be to move the title ("misfire") to upper left corner or up and middle. When it's on the low left corner, it makes the reader start there and it's difficult to jump to panel 1 without going through panel 4 (the first slanted one). Another minor detail in panel.... oh wait. This is just what @mouseclicker meant: I confused panel 5 for panel 4. Anyway. The "dropping" has movement lines both upwards and downwards, but since it's moving supposedly only downwards the lines under it are unnecessary.
But other than that, I like how you've drawn the bird and the wings in different positions with consistency.
