Hey guys, i tried to fill in the negative space areas a little with not much contrast to try and draw attention away from the areas. Here is how the colored version is looking so far

Hey Mac, everyone is correct about the confusion of the composition. You'll notice from my draw over that the area of greatest contrast is actually the blank areas on the sides. It draws my eyes there instead of the main subject. Make sure you find ways to draw attention to your main subject with contrast (easier to do in color) and leading lines. Hope this helps :)

I would add to what the others said, some help with focus. If value structure and maybe color were added, that could help. It reminds me of the Disney Alice In Wonderland. Very nicely done line work and perspective

This looks great already! Will this be coloured? The main thing I find with it is difficulty finding the focal point. I’m not experienced enough to give good instruction but maybe emphasize with line weight and also be careful of tangents.