Please help me with a shading I just submitted...HELP MY LIFE PLEEEAASE😭😭😭

Its the same one

To Stan:thanks for that graphite demo(the portrait one)please more in the future. Also how do you draw gesture with graphite(do you use the overhand grip) and how would you shade the three basic forms WITH GRAPHITE

Please draw with graphite,I need real time videos of you drawing with graphite...since that's what I can afford/ find