Two things I'm noticing. First, the drawing is pretty contour-heavy. Remember your 30sec gesture, and use that as a start point - get the feeling of the pose across first before diving into the specifics. Second, you've got the points in their generally correct location but they feel a bit arbitrary. Everything in the body connects to itself - if you look hard enough, each of those points will either be along a curve or at the end of one. Try going through the video here and copying Stan verbatim to understand how he rationalizes the location of each landmark, then move on to applying what you learned to another model pose. On the positive, your proportions are looking solid and that's certainly a finecky thing to get down!